Help?

Mar. 31st, 2016 01:07 pm
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I'm trying to write something, and what I really need is some examples of a long drawn out penetrative sex scene. Does anyone have any fic recs with something like that in there? Any fandom, any slash pairing will do. I'm not going to plagiarize anything, obviously - I'll work out a way to kick myself in the face before I do anything like that - I just would like a sense of what to concentrate on, how to make it seem like it lasts longer than it takes to read the sentences, if that makes sense? If anyone could help me out, I would greatly appreciate it! ♥

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Date: 2016-03-31 12:41 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] nia_kantorka
Mmh, I love the one of A Cure For Boredom by emmagrant01 between John and Sherlock after what feels like ages of pinning and UST. It happens after a lot of sex had already happened, not between John/Sherlock. It's such a kinky and entertaining story, but the sex in this scene is more about the connection. That's what you're looking for, isn't it?

I love the act in itself because it's hot as hell and not perfect. That makes for a realistic and great first time.
Link goes to the last chapter (8) of the story: http://archiveofourown.org/works/335385/chapters/603545

I'm not sure it's long enough though?
Edited Date: 2016-03-31 12:43 pm (UTC)

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Date: 2016-03-31 12:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lauren3210.livejournal.com
Thank you, I shall check that out!

And yeah, it's their first time, and I want it to be about their connection, the overwhelming feel of it, you know? So I want it to concentrate more on the overall feeling rather than just the physical aspects (the sliding in and out, the prostate, etc), so I just really want a few examples where that's described while the sex is ongoing, to help me figure out how to word it myself.

Thank you! ♥

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Date: 2016-03-31 01:05 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] eidheann_writes
Tense by faithwood?

3k but...

http://archiveofourown.org/works/1110284

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Date: 2016-03-31 01:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lauren3210.livejournal.com
I shall definitely have a look, thank you! ♥

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Date: 2016-03-31 01:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kerrilee75.livejournal.com
Immediately a scene in Helix by saras_girl jumped into my head. Its a first time, too. I'm not sure if it's front of mind because it's drawn out or just very tender and emotional. Let me see if I can find it, unless you've already tried her.

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Date: 2016-03-31 01:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lauren3210.livejournal.com
Ooh no, I haven't seen that, thank you! A link would be greatly appreciated! ♥ ♥

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Date: 2016-03-31 01:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kerrilee75.livejournal.com
Try this:
http://archiveofourown.org/works/3114812/chapters/6749339

It's Harry's first time bottoming. In a previous chapter is their actual first time together. I'm still looking because I thought there was a really intense tent scene but I could just be combining a couple in my mind.

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Date: 2016-03-31 01:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lauren3210.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! I really appreciate the help :)

And haha yeah, that happens to me a lot too, I read so many they all blur together sometimes!

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Date: 2016-03-31 02:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kerrilee75.livejournal.com
Gah! I didn't find what I was thinking of. I hope you find some inspiration!

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Date: 2016-03-31 02:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lauren3210.livejournal.com
That's okay, you are an absolute sweetheart for taking the time to look for me! I'm definitely going to check out the ones recommended, and see if any of those hits the spot. Thanks for your help! *hugs*

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Date: 2016-03-31 03:25 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] gracerene
Endowment by [livejournal.com profile] dicta_contrion is pretty much 10k of smut and amazing!

I know I've read several drawn out penetration scenes, but not many are immediately coming to mind, unfortunately. :/

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Date: 2016-03-31 03:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lauren3210.livejournal.com
I know what you mean, I'm sure I've read loads in the past, but I can't think of anything that I know will meet what I need *is frustrated*

I think what I'm looking for is an intense description of what the bottom feels while getting fucked - and not just the physical aspect of it. *sigh* Anyway, I'm doing my best to write it myself now (180 words in 2 hours, man, it is NOT going well, lol), so we'll have to see when we get there.

Actually, do you mind if I send you an email? Maybe bounce it off you a little? I know you're busy right now though...

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Date: 2016-03-31 03:34 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] gracerene
Email away! You know I love chatting. :D

I'm trying to think of fics...I'll let you know if something comes to me!

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Date: 2016-03-31 03:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lauren3210.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'll send you something in a sec - it worked fabulously last time, even if I did end up suspending that particular story in favour of all the new ones crowding my brain, haha!

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Date: 2016-03-31 06:28 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] snowgall
If fingering counts as penetrative sex (and shouldn't it? :) there's always Slip Into My Lover's Hands by [livejournal.com profile] lumosed_quill - 6K of fantastic drawn-out fingering porn (which also includes standard penetrative sex as well)

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Date: 2016-03-31 06:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lauren3210.livejournal.com
I knew you'd have a few for me, haha! And thanks, I have read that fic before, so I shall go and refamiliarise myself with it, see if the words knock something loose ♥

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Date: 2016-03-31 07:23 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] capitu
I came to remind you about Endowment by and [livejournal.com profile] lumosed_quill's Slip Into My Lover's Hands, but I saw those are covered. ^^ There's also Euphoria and Unguarded by [livejournal.com profile] birdsofshore

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Date: 2016-03-31 07:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lauren3210.livejournal.com
Oh thank you, darling! I shall spend the evening reading these, and hopefully they'll give me some inspiration! ♥

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Date: 2016-03-31 09:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dicta-contrion.livejournal.com
Ooh, I've got one! These Inconvenient Fireworks! Not HP, but one of the top five best fics I've ever read, period. Worth reading the whole thing, but for your immediate purposes, pp 431-436 in that pdf. It's part of a larger sex scene (which is an emotional moment in the story so might not all make sense if you read the bits around it, and might be a little spoilery if you read even like half a page past the bottom of 436) and the authors do an amazing job with it, and it's 5 straight pages of penetrative sex from the bottom's perspective.

edited bc I forgot how to html *facepalm*
Edited Date: 2016-03-31 09:43 pm (UTC)

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Date: 2016-03-31 10:22 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lauren3210.livejournal.com
Thank you SO much! I've had a quick skim and it looks absolutely perfect, so I think between that and the Thorki fic Grace put me onto, I should be able to figure something out! Brilliant, thank you! *smooches*
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